Here's a short film I did with some Bay influence.

[The Film Junkie]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m9rXEQ3ngAM

Just wanna know what you guys think.

[kevski]

Good effort dude

The Good
Nice use of colour
Good editing when he wanders through the woods, felt disorientating.
Nice pacing, was interesting to watch despite the negatives
Proves you don't need a budget and can make a DV Cam movie look pretty slick.

The Bad
Seems to suffer from the 'student film beginning'. I've noticed that 90% of student films always start with a character getting up and making breakfast/tea/etc. Always frustrated me... just get on with the story.
I wouldn't have realised he was a war vet on some kind of secret mission if I didn't read the description first.
Dodge sound editing
I always found it a lazy technique when using a song over a whole film. Could have been more interesting without music.
Acting didn't seem natural

[Ricardo]

Hey, first of all, nice work. I know how hard it is to make this sort of short movies. This movie didn't look like a firsttimer, so congrats to that to:)

I was wondering, what kind of camera you used? is it PAL or NTSC? because that would explain why it's a bit blurry (and the type of camera plays a part to).

Good things I noticed:

- Storyline, it was very clear, everybody could follow it.
- Editing in the most parts, nice cuts in the walking part.

Less good

- Coulors, liked the first part (bit dark) but then at a certain point it goes 5600K daylight, your camera probebly had an other whitning position.
- The shots itself, it started very good, but I was hoping you had more close up's in the middle part. Now it goes a bit medium-total-medium-medium, but close up shots you can always use, and they are nicer to watch.
- Sound, use dialogues and not to much music, music camoeflages your mistakes in sound mostly :)

I always say: a movie where they only use total shots will win a razzie and a movie where they use only close-up's will win an oscar. This is an example, not reffering to anything ;)


Because Less good got more lines, don't think I didn't like it, because I did. You can better have a worse editing with beautiful shots then a good editing with worse shots.

Keep up the good work :)

[The Film Junkie]

Hey, appreciate it fellas. This was actually a basic Cinematography class at the University, shooting the same (sort of lame) script, strictly visuals, no dialogue rule. So Ricardo, the third scene starting off with the hike all the way to the disorienting montage was shot on a Panasonic DVX100, it was probably NTSC. And the begininng interior shots and final forest scene at the end was all unfortunately shot on a Sony TRV Home Video Camera. So I exported it at Premier at 24FPS, and maybe it wasn't too noticable. Yah I wasn't able to use the DVX 100 all the way due to Internship issues.

[Ricardo]

Hey, appreciate it fellas. This was actually a basic Cinematography class at the University, shooting the same (sort of lame) script, strictly visuals, no dialogue rule. So Ricardo, the third scene starting off with the hike all the way to the disorienting montage was shot on a Panasonic DVX100, it was probably NTSC. And the begininng interior shots and final forest scene at the end was all unfortunately shot on a Sony TRV Home Video Camera. So I exported it at Premier at 24FPS, and maybe it wasn't too noticable. Yah I wasn't able to use the DVX 100 all the way due to Internship issues.


I see, okay, nice job eitherway. At my school I shoot with a Sony PD570 PAL which I think gives a better image then a NTSC, but you can't help that, there's no world standard.

[kevski]

Have you guys shot anything on film?

[BeetleJuice]

Some advice... it needs more action... lots of action... violence... lots of violence... huge explosions... massive explosions... comedy... mega frickin cool robots... mega frickin cool robots mano a mano... super hot chicks... and a chiwawa:p

[The Film Junkie]

I should be shooting for the first time on film this semester in for advance Cinematography. Most likely our own film, 16mm, looks like there will be a lot of of loans to be taken out, heh.

[Ricardo]

Have you guys shot anything on film?

I've made a whole bunch of movies at my school, but I don't have them on this pc.